The use of dialog
The problem of inflation
The issue of market manipulation
The question of cheating
The scourge of drug addition
The debate on gun laws
The use of information
The matter of crime
The importance of legislation
The nature of criminals
The phenomenon of cheating
The practice of murder
The publication of the report
The announcement of the news
The power of the imagination
The significance of the result
The result of the survey
Very often the formula "The X of Y" (or, more generally "The + preposition (of/on/at/in/by/around etc) + Y at the top of a sentence weakens it.
Using "The X of Y" can obscure clarity because it forces an additional cognitive step to understand the relationship between X and Y. The structure can divert attention from the central subject by interposing a concept (X) that may be abstract or less immediate.
To improve clarity, you can directly state what you mean without the "X of Y" construct. Instead, use people if possible but also groups and things, and give them verbs to do For example:
- Instead of "The use of dialogue," write "Characters speak."
- Instead of "The problem of inflation," write "Inflation erodes purchasing power."
- Instead of "The issue of market manipulation," write "Traders manipulate markets."
- Instead of "The question of cheating," write "Students cheat on exams."
- Instead of "The scourge of drug addiction," write "Drug addiction devastates communities."
- Instead of "The debate on gun laws," write "Legislators argue over gun control."
- Instead of "The use of information," write "Companies collect data."
- Instead of "The matter of crime," write "Crime rates fluctuate."
- Instead of "The importance of legislation," write "Laws shape society."
- Instead of "The nature of criminals," write "Criminals can be violent or non-violent."
- Instead of "The phenomenon of cheating," write "Cheating is widespread."
- Instead of "The practice of murder," write "Murderers kill."
- Instead of "The publication of the report," write "The report exposes facts."
- Instead of "The announcement of the news," write "The media broadcasts events."
- Instead of "The power of the imagination," write "Imagination creates worlds."
- Instead of "The significance of the result," write "Results confirm ."
- Instead of "The result of the survey," write "The survey shows ."
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