Never use when compared to in your writing when all you really mean is compared to.
The same applies to when it comes to and many when + present participle
When refers to time.
For example, America has higher unemployment when compared with
Germany suggests
that unemployment is higher only when you compare it, the nonsensical
implication of which is that if you stopped comparing it, maybe it wouldn't be
higher. Unless you think that unemployment exists in a quantum state of uncertainty until you look at it, the phrase is absurd.
The other horrible thing about that sentence, which I hope you spotted,
is that "compared with" itself is wrong. If you have a comparative
adjective, you follow it with "than".
The sentence should therefore read:
America has higher unemployment than
Germany.
Here
are some more examples of what not to do:
She does better in her tests when
compared with other students - But whenever she is not compared with
others, she does worse? Just use “…than other students”
When compared with your lunch, mine
seems far less appetizing (if
I stop comparing, will it therefore become more appetizing? Just write: Compared
with your lunch, mine seems far less appetizing or, even better, because
simpler: “My lunch seems far less
appetizing than yours.”
This school, when compared with others in the
district, has more students from China (Stop comparing and the number of Chinese
students falls?)
If you start a sentence with "When talking about/discussing/considering..etc." ask yourself two questions:
1. Who is doing the considering, discussing thinking etc?
2. If this person or these people stop thinking abut the thing, would it still be true or important? If so, just say the true and important thing.
When draws too much attention to the act of thinking, considering etc at the expense of the thing considered.,
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